I was able to feel sympathy throughout the whole speech. We all have a superhero in our hearts and I surely believe that a superhero named 'Dad' is the strongest superhero out of all. I really liked the content of your speech, specifically the values and the experiences and how you learned from those values. I also believe that leadership is an essential aspect. However, I thought it would have been better if you used visual aid to show some pictures of your dad and also family pictures so that we could be more sympathized, imagining of our dads. Also, you tend to pause a bit which kind of sounded a bit awkward. It truly was an impressive speech and I would like to hear a speech about your mom in the future!
Thanks for the feedbacks! i knew to there were some pauses between.. couldn't held my breath through the whole sentence hehe and also that's one possible options:) As i told you earlier yours were impressive as well:)
Sohee Lee Hello. This is Sohee lee, one of your classmates and your teammate as well. 1.To begin with, I really liked the overall structure of your speech. The opening was catchy enough to grab my attention. Signal phrases you used before presenting different categories were well presented. I also liked how you ended your speech with a good closer. 2.The content of your speech was very impressive. The values you learned through your experiences were very interesting. I was able to know how your father affected your life through lessons of love, dedication to something, and living a life that you desire. I was able to clearly understand why your dad is your superhero. 3.It was truly an inspirational speech. Listening to your speech made me think of my dad too.Thank you for your great speech. I truly enjoyed it.
Comments by myself : 1. I think i've done well with the part conveying the message about my dad's life lessons. From the script and from the feedbacks, i could see the audience understood it well. 2. it would've been better if i had more eye contacts with the audience, and stress the parts that i want to focus. I used indicators to do that, but the intonations while delivering the speech are more important. 3. Probably next time, i would let go of the mic. I always use hand motions while doing a speech, and it feels more comfortable and natural. but due to the sounds in filming the video, i had to use the mic because i'm not a loud speaker. On the next assignment, i'll need to speak louder. 4. Again, I'm content about the message itself. But as Dong gun said about using extra materials, i'll try doing it on my next speech.
Comments by myself : 1. I think i've done well with the part conveying the message about my dad's life lessons. From the script and from the feedbacks, i could see the audience understood it well. 2. it would've been better if i had more eye contacts with the audience, and stress the parts that i want to focus. I used indicators to do that, but the intonations while delivering the speech are more important. 3. Probably next time, i would let go of the mic. I always use hand motions while doing a speech, and it feels more comfortable and natural. but due to the sounds in filming the video, i had to use the mic because i'm not a loud speaker. On the next assignment, i'll need to speak louder. 4. Again, I'm content about the message itself. But as Dong gun said about using extra materials, i'll try doing it on my next speech.
Before I comment anything about your speech, I want to say that I was truly touched. I do also love my dad, however never thought that I could 'admire' him as a superhero. Your opening totally caught me, and I had the opportunity to think about my dad through your speech. I could also seek passion in your voice, which made me believe almost every word you say. You have good flow in your overall speech. However, I thought you could use a bit more hand movements. It will help you look less stiff. Except that your speech inspired me very much. Thank you for your presentation!
Dong Gun Lee
ReplyDeleteI was able to feel sympathy throughout the whole speech. We all have a superhero in our hearts and I surely believe that a superhero named 'Dad' is the strongest superhero out of all. I really liked the content of your speech, specifically the values and the experiences and how you learned from those values. I also believe that leadership is an essential aspect. However, I thought it would have been better if you used visual aid to show some pictures of your dad and also family pictures so that we could be more sympathized, imagining of our dads. Also, you tend to pause a bit which kind of sounded a bit awkward.
It truly was an impressive speech and I would like to hear a speech about your mom in the future!
Thanks for the feedbacks! i knew to there were some pauses between.. couldn't held my breath through the whole sentence hehe
Deleteand also that's one possible options:) As i told you earlier yours were impressive as well:)
Sohee Lee
ReplyDeleteHello. This is Sohee lee, one of your classmates and your teammate as well.
1.To begin with, I really liked the overall structure of your speech. The opening was catchy enough to grab my attention. Signal phrases you used before presenting different categories were well presented. I also liked how you ended your speech with a good closer.
2.The content of your speech was very impressive. The values you learned through your experiences were very interesting. I was able to know how your father affected your life through lessons of love, dedication to something, and living a life that you desire. I was able to clearly understand why your dad is your superhero.
3.It was truly an inspirational speech. Listening to your speech made me think of my dad too.Thank you for your great speech. I truly enjoyed it.
Thanks a lot for your comments:) as i mentioned i really liked yours too:)
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ReplyDelete1. I think i've done well with the part conveying the message about my dad's life lessons. From the script and from the feedbacks, i could see the audience understood it well.
2. it would've been better if i had more eye contacts with the audience, and stress the parts that i want to focus. I used indicators to do that, but the intonations while delivering the speech are more important.
3. Probably next time, i would let go of the mic. I always use hand motions while doing a speech, and it feels more comfortable and natural. but due to the sounds in filming the video, i had to use the mic because i'm not a loud speaker. On the next assignment, i'll need to speak louder.
4. Again, I'm content about the message itself. But as Dong gun said about using extra materials, i'll try doing it on my next speech.
Comments by myself :
ReplyDelete1. I think i've done well with the part conveying the message about my dad's life lessons. From the script and from the feedbacks, i could see the audience understood it well.
2. it would've been better if i had more eye contacts with the audience, and stress the parts that i want to focus. I used indicators to do that, but the intonations while delivering the speech are more important.
3. Probably next time, i would let go of the mic. I always use hand motions while doing a speech, and it feels more comfortable and natural. but due to the sounds in filming the video, i had to use the mic because i'm not a loud speaker. On the next assignment, i'll need to speak louder.
4. Again, I'm content about the message itself. But as Dong gun said about using extra materials, i'll try doing it on my next speech.
Sumin Cho
ReplyDeleteBefore I comment anything about your speech, I want to say that I was truly touched. I do also love my dad, however never thought that I could 'admire' him as a superhero. Your opening totally caught me, and I had the opportunity to think about my dad through your speech. I could also seek passion in your voice, which made me believe almost every word you say. You have good flow in your overall speech. However, I thought you could use a bit more hand movements. It will help you look less stiff. Except that your speech inspired me very much. Thank you for your presentation!